Editting-Resrach Paper

I have a 41/2 pages of Research Paper that I want to be editted and peer-reviewed. 

I need;

-Gramatical correction

-Change of some words and sentences

-connection between paragraphs

-Coherent paper with all aspects

-Two additional paragraph added and an additional research with citation to the paper in order to make it better and long enough to exceed 5 pages.

 

I have highlighted some part of the essay that I want you to also look at